（b）改寫後： May I have the opportunity to discuss this matter further with you? My telephone is Kenmore 69781. You can reach me between nine and five o‘clock during the day. 可否惠予面談以便進一步商討？我的電話是K-69781。我從上午九時到下午五時都可接通。
5．太過自信的句子： I am quite certain that an interview will substantiate my statements Between two and four every afternoon except Tuesday you can reach me by telephoning 731430. 我深信面談可以證實我的話。您可在每天下午二至四時（星期二例外）打731430號電話通知我。
6．較具體有效的句子。 May I have an interview? My residence telephone is (042) 4398. You reach me by calling that number until June 30. After July 2, my address will be Kent House, Bretton Woods, New Hampshire. 可否惠予面談？我住處電話為43981號。六月三十日以前我都在上址，七月二日以後，我的新址為新罕不夏州佈列登林肯特屋。
應徵函的'語氣
應徵函要發揮最大的效果，語氣必須肯定、自信、有創意而不過份誇張，如能事先洞察僱主的喜好，或其他人格特性，根據物以類聚的原理，應徵函若能配合僱主的特性，求職的人一定可以比其他人佔上風，獲得面談的機會。 比較下列各句語氣上有何不同：
1．I think that I should probably make a good bookkeeper for you. 我想我可能成為貴公司的好簿記號。
2．I am confident that my experience and references will show you that I can fulfill the particular requirements of your bookkeeping position. 我想信我的經驗和推薦人可以告訴您，我能夠符合貴公司簿記員一職的特定需要。
3．I recently completed a course in filing at the Crosby School of Business. I am competent not only to install a filing system that will fulfill the needs of your organization, but I am also well qualified to operate it efficiently. 最近我在克洛斯比商業補習班讀完一門檔案處理的課程，我自信不僅可以設定一套檔案人類系統符合您的要求，而且可以有效地操作。
4．I feel quite certain that as a result of the course in filing which I completed at the Crosby School of Business, I can install and operate efficiently a filing system for your organization. 我相信在克洛斯比商業實習班修完一門課後，我能夠替貴公司設定並且操作一套檔案分類系統。
第一句顯得語氣太弱，寫信的人有點羞怯的樣子。第二句有特殊風格，第三句太過自信，第四句，作者表示謙虛。