會考英語寫作點評指導範文記敘文

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(二)記敘文及範文點評

會考英語寫作點評指導範文記敘文

記敘文記人敘事,國中英語記敘文與語文中的記敘文是相通的,耍弄清是寫人、寫事。國中學生的英語寫作處於入門階段,寫人作文只是介紹性的,但要重點突出,用詞力求準確貼切,多用簡單句,適當使用複合句。

寫人可以寫的方面很多,如介紹姓名、年齡、職業、興趣愛好、外貌、特長等,常見的句式如:

This is my friend, Mary.

She is ... years old.

She is a teacher/an artist/a singer...

She/He gets up at 6/5 ... /early/late.

She/He has sports at school.

She/He likes...

She/He is strong/fat/slim/kind/thin...

She/He looks like...

She/He is good at English/maths/Chinese/physics...

範文1

My Best Friend

My best friend is one of my classmates. Her name is Mary. Every day, we go to school together and go back home together. We often help each other and learn from each other in study. We have the same hobby-collecting stamps. She has many nice stamps. She is very proud of them. Sometimes she gives some of them to me. I think she is a very- good girl. We will be good friends forever.

點評:這是一篇記人的`敘述文。先交代了My Best Friend是誰,接著通過事例交代了為什麼“我們是最好的朋友”。最後闡述了主題。

範文2

My Class Teacher

My class teacher is Mr. Wang. He is strict but kind. He has taught us Chinese for two years. He always tells us to study hard but not all the time. Sometimes he plays with us. He says, "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” I think he is a good class teacher.

點評:這篇文章取材都是身邊熟悉的人,作者也有東西可寫,更具有可讀性。另外,寫人時可以把主語稍作調整,讀起來輕鬆多了。

I am a 15-year-old girl. My name is Cherry. Now I am studying in the middle school.1 want to be an actress because I think It is a funny and exciting job...

寫事一定要交代時間、地點、人物、情節。常用的句型如:

It took place/happened…

Last/week/year/Monday/Tuesday...

One Friday morning..

範文3

Our Class Meeting

Last Friday afternoon we had our last class meeting in our classroom. All the students and our class teacher took part in it. We held a warm discussion about our future life. Each of us spoke at the meeting actively. After the discussion, we all decided to study hard so as to make our life better and better.

點評:這篇文章條理清楚,記敘完整,短短的五句話有簡單句,也有複合句,交代了時間、地點、人物、原因、經過、結果等六要素

範文4

Hot Springs Let Me Have A Rest

We took off our coats and ran quickly into the lemon spring. When I first put my feet into the water. I cried out, "Wow, it is hot!”I didn't know the water was so hot, and I was a little afraid that it would burn me... So I walked carefully into the spring. One step, two... I felt the heat slowly climbing up my body.

點評:要寫出生動有趣的事,除了把事情的來龍去脈說清楚,還一定要注意增加文章的細節,這是必不可少的,豐富的細節描寫能為你的文章增色不少,使人讀起來具有一種身臨其境的感覺。